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Noun As a Phrase

My customers are in sweats and heavy sweaters, their hair unbrushed, lazy Saturday, the week peeling off of them. (How Lucky You Are, Lewis, page 33)
One of the ways that change occurs is through SePG. Authors can break the rules, to create an effect, and as long as the sentence can be understood through SePG, it will make sense. Um, as far as I know Hemingway did that with leaving the comma out of a compound sentence. But that was like70 years ago, and everyone does it so often now that I think most writers don't know the correct rule. And readers surely don't.

So you can't be cutting edge with that. Or using a comma in a compound predicate (which dates back to at least Crichton) or the new meaning of the participial phrase, which might have been newish when Dan Brown was writing, but now is typical.


You can read my book about how to write in SePG. Then your writing will be cutting edge. Well, Clark has written a book in SePG, so that goes back to about 2000. However, he isn't well-known, and he didn't have my book to guide his efforts. And, most importantly, there are a lot of different ways of using SePG. Even if you just practice SePG and then try to write normal, it might infect your "normal" writing.

Anyway, back to constructs. Does SePG suggest any new constructs? The only one I have noticed in my writing is the noun as a phrase. It looks like this:

Walking into the house after school, ah shit, I forgot about My Father's Wife, I never expected her to be waiting for me, an ambush, isn't she supposed to be working? I have to live with her and my dad so I can go to Ferndale.
Anyway, it has ambush. That's meaningful, and according to SePG, any noun is meaningful and can be it's own phrase (in the sense of being surrounded by commas).

Of course, a noun could be surrounded by commas because it's parenthetical, but this isn't what's happening here.

More examples:

Momentary confusion . . . trying to orient himself . . . strong . . . quick . . . four legs . . . wolf . . . they changed him into a large wolf!

Apparently SePG is also more free with interjections. I think the above is not typical. This isn't:

Oh, ugh, duh, stupid me. She looks shocked, then offended, shit, females never like me, I thought this was going to be different.